He stood breathless in his tux staring at her figure moving toward him—her white gown almost glowing.
She was a vision.
He knew that as he scanned the slick road. Chunks of metal and shattered taillights littering the pavement. He knew but he tried talking to her anyway, asking if she could hear him. She nodded and started crying.
“I’m sorry,” he choked, “I’m sorry, love. It’s my fault.”
She spoke but no sound reached him. “You,” she mouthed. “You are the vision.” She pointed to a body on the ground. It was a man in a tux.
December 24 Prompt: Visions (Write a story that includes a vision)
Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch
Lemon Shark Reef 
Goosebumps! You artfully trick the reader into buying the bridal vision and then deliver us to the scene of the wreck. Wow! Great flash!
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Thank you, kindly. This one (yet again) didn’t start out this way but, alas, characters will do as they please. 😉 So glad you liked it.
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Very short piece, but you shocked me at the end. Awesome.
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Excellent. I never can tell if I’ve gotten it quite right. Thank you!
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Oh gosh horrid; twist the story and stab the reader. You have such a eye for surprising the reader though I do worry that you seem to enjoy a deeper shade of black in doing so. Have some light and fluffy times, Ms B, in 2015!
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I am practicing my “twist and stab” move with these flashes. And, yes, enjoying it. 🙂 Thanks so much. I’ll try some lighter stuff out but have always been partial to darker shades. (And please do remember what happened with the rainbows and unicorns… Be careful what you wish for.)
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I definitely felt that – the twist and stab, right in the gut! Great story 🙂
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Thanks! 🙂
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Who says that’s dark!?!
At least he was gifted a pleasant vision at the end 😉
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That is true… I’m going with Anne here.
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Beautifully chilling, Sarah.
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Thank you, Anne. Much appreciated.
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Great twist on a “vision”! I love how you use the same word to describe two terribly different things.
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Thanks! I love how everyone interprets the same prompt so differently.
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Awesome! What a twist. It reminds me of “The Sixth Sense”. Well done. 🙂
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Haha! Hadn’t thought of that. Thanks!
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