A Deadly Substitution


“Your Majesty, I beseech you…”

“It is not your place,” the king continued rewrapping tampered-with food parcels. “I’m surprised it’s you who objects.”

“I live for the court,” the jester looked at his pointy shoes mumbling, “and this may bring the end of it.”

“What was that?”

Taking a deep breath, the jester lifted his head, bells on his hat jingling. “The commoners…they will revolt.”

“Nonsense!” The king’s face reddened, softened, and then he laughed. “Ah, another of your jokes.”

The jester cringed. “No joke, Your Majesty. Substituting carob for chocolate… It may be the end of the kingdom.”



The weekly 99-word Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch  

February 4, prompt: Substitution – In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that features a substitution. *Bonus points for fairy tale elements.

#BlogBattle is a monthly writing prompt for flash fiction/short stories hosted by Rachael Ritchey.

February Prompt: Revolution 



34 thoughts on “A Deadly Substitution

  1. Pingback: Substituting « Carrot Ranch Literary Community

  2. The peasants are revolting…! Delicious bite of humor here. The fact the king was rewrapping food parcels made me wonder if he was getting ready to poison somebody. The jester’s revelation proved that maybe I wasn’t so wrong. Fun read!

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  3. Short and sweets Sarah…or should the be short and missing chocolate? Bound to cause a revolt if the whole point of a food parcel was chocolate! Although there’s chocolate and chocolate… not that I’m a connoisseur or anything. I do know one chap that considers certain styles commoner chocolate and that only Hotel Chocolate counts!! I’ve also heard rumour American versions are, shall we say, lacking in true flavour.

    I digress… fun extract and long live the peasants!

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