His tie was blue. A nice enough color. The geometric design wasn’t all that unpleasant. A bit modern for my taste, but not obnoxious.
I suppose it could have been his shirt, with its burgundy basketweave pattern. But, if I’m honest, the whole thing blew up because of his pink paisley jacket.
I couldn’t tell if he was nice enough for me to look past his fashion faux pas.
When my sister asked how the date with her co-worker went, I shrugged, “I have no idea. His clothes were so loud, I couldn’t hear a word he said.”
Totally goofing this week with a ridiculous entry for:
Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch
September 7, 2017 prompt: Busy– In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a busy character.
Lemon Shark Reef 
Haha. Busy clothes can be a turn off (or I guess a turn on depending on your artistic bent). Roger had a busy shirt once that he loved until one day at the petrol station the cash register man asked me (I’d gone to pay while he filled) was I with the chap that had the shirt on that someone had vomited on. He never wore it again.
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😂 That’s awesome, Irene. I’m sure he never wore it again. And I’ll bet you were pleased. We often call really loud clothing “clown vomit”. I know. We are so mature.
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Haha. Who wants to become mature. Perhaps clown vomit is what the garage man meant.
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Fun story — and I loved that last line!
It really gives insight into the character of your narrator. 🙂
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Hey, thanks! 🙂 Yes. Glad that came through (even with the silliness of the piece). The narrator is quite overwhelmed with the visual and can’t concentrate. I may write more with her. Strange how characters emerge.
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I can just imagine this guy. Loved his pink paisley jacket.
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Yeah, the pink paisley just took his look right over the edge. 😉
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Nice, Sarah. How many of us haven’t experienced that last line. I can totally “see” it. 😀
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I’ll bet you wish you could unsee it. 😜 Thanks, Diana. Some goofing is needed every once in a blue moon with an orange gingham sky. (What a cool name for a short story!) “Orange Gingham Sky” Hmm…
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I’ll be waiting for the story 🙂
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Hi Sarah, I love this piece. What a date! Yes, we’ve all seen those too-busy clothes.
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Thanks, Norah. Just wanted to do something different with a “busy” character. 😉 Ha! Yes, we’ve all seen those clothes.
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Totally goofy but great fun, Sarah. Nice to see such a different take on the theme.
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Yes. Very goofy but kind of fun to write a different “busy”. 😜 Thanks, Anne.
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This is great, Sarah.
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Thanks, Robbie. 🙂 Silly fun.
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Brilliant the way you build the punchiness of your take on busy. At the realization its all about his clothes, I laughed outloud at the pink paisley jacket and how over the top that detail is. Yet you start with a blue tie. Ah! That’s what works so well in this flash. Glad you weren’t too busy! Pity I’m running a week behind my own tail! Or tale?
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Yeah, pink paisley… That wouldn’t go over well even without the other ‘busy’ patterns. 😉 Ah, yes. The blue tie. Just a blue tie. What could go wrong? (I’m always running to catch my tail/tale. No shame in that. Take care of yourself.)
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He could have made it work with a blue tie! Alas, he was in the hands of an author with other plans. 😂 You take care, too! Wear what you want!
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Haha! Yes. *rubs hands together* What mean thing can I do to my character…?
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Goof offs are the best. If clothes make the man, that was a loud one indeed. 🙂
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Goofing off is quite fun. 🙂 Thank you!
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