My teacher slaps my desk. I jump.
Students keep their heads down. I’m glad for this.
He asks me a question. Tells me it’s the second time he’s asked. That I’m not paying attention.
He’s right. I’m not. At least not to this lesson. I’ve been staring at his robe.
The edges are frayed.
Teachers are respected in The Society. They wear the robes of the higher classes. Dark blue. Tailored. Immaculate.
He sees me eyeing his sleeve and yanks his hand away. Something is wrong. I make a mental note to look at the other teachers after lessons.
Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch
June 29, 2017 prompt: Frayed – In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about something frayed. It could be fabric, like a flag or garment. It could also be nerves or temper.
Great tension between what is supposed to hold attention and what narrow detail the student notices. So much intentional in the explanation. Great flash!
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Thanks, Charli. 🙂 That detail is a sign of something, methinks.
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Yes, and it holds a mystery waiting to unravel…!
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This is intriguing, Sarah. I thought it was starting out as trouble for a daydreamer, but that idea soon frayed at the edges. I wonder what is going on.
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I wonder, too. 😉 I’m pantsing my way through this one. Something is definitely fraying here…more than a robe. Thanks, Norah.
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Great flash!
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Thank you, Susan. 🙂
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Most intriguing, Sarah, reads as both a story in itself and the start of an epic novel.
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You just made me so happy. 🙂 This is part of a larger piece (probably a novel). Thank you so much.
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Something is definitely up. Very Potter-esque, Sarah 🙂
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Something is up. And I wasn’t thinking of HP at all when I wrote this but as soon as I wrote that line about him yanking his hand away, I thought of Snape! 😀
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Isn’t that funny how little details might capture the aura of something? I think it was the classroom, the robes, the sense of magic, secrets, and something out of the ordinary about to happen. 🙂
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Love it…as ripped from the early sections of a novel…
What comes next?!
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I’m so happy you said that because this is part of a larger work. 🙂 I was contemplating what to do with it, exactly, but it’s going to be something larger. Already writing it. Thank you!
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Go for it! 😀
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Very nice, Sarah. I wonder what is happening.
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Something is not right… 😉 Thanks, Robbie!
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Very cool! I want to know what’s up.
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Thanks, Allison! I think something is fraying… And not just a robe.
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