“This is boring,” Caleb whined.
“It’s father-son bonding. It’s fun.” He wiped sweat from his forehead. “It’s…hot.”
“Something we agree on,” Caleb mumbled. “Can we go now?”
“I’ve got the boat until two.” His father sighed. “Crap. This is boring.”
“Race?” Caleb stood, pulling off his t-shirt.
His father dove into the water. “Head start for the old man!”
She rose from the waves. Glorious and horrible. Eyes gleaming, hair spilling over her breasts.
“Dad!”
“Aw, c’mon…” He splashed Caleb.
“Get back here! Swim back…now!”
She smiled at Caleb, her mouth rows of shark teeth. “Fear. My comfort food.”
I’ve combined two prompts again this week: A 99-word flash about “comfort food” and a thriller/horror with the word “splash”. It was, um, difficult. But I do love a challenge and it was fun. 🙂
#BlogBattle is a weekly writing prompt for flash fiction/short stories (with a word AND genre theme) hosted by Rachael Ritchey
Week 18 Prompt: Splash
Genre: Suspense/Thriller/Horror
and Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch which asks writers to pen a piece in 99 words (this week’s prompt: Comfort Food).
May 4, 2017 prompt: Comfort Food – In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story write about comfort food.
Lemon Shark Reef 
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:-O Loved the surprise-end POV shift!
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😄 Thanks!
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See this is what we need. Less stories about sexy and romantic mermaids…more stories about them eating people! LOL! Well done, Sarah…as always. #mast ❤
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We do need more man-eating mermaids. 😂 I’m happy to deliver. Stupid sexy ones are boring. #mast 💙
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Fun drabble! The picture works really well with the story; very ominous!
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I know! I found that picture after I wrote the 99-word prompt. Couldn’t believe it. Thanks. This was a difficult challenge for sure.
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A great reversal in thinking — when a character becomes the comfort food! I like how the scene evolves from Dad admitting the activity is boring to becoming a thriller.
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They were going to have a nice father-son fishing trip… I don’t know what happened. 😂 I had to write a thriller/horror but it wasn’t going to be this!
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The author innocently says, “I don’t know what happened…!” 😀
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You were successful in your combining of the two prompts. I fear for Caleb.
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Caleb is lunch. 😉 I don’t think I’ll combine prompts this different again. I love a challenge but… Yikes.
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I thought he was. Dad wasn’t frightened……yet! I think your description of the female beast was fantastic and finding her comfort food an inspiration. If I were you I wouldn’t write off the combining too quickly.
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Yes, I think they both are on the menu. Thanks! 🙂
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I liked the gotcha – the hunted became the hunter for comfort food.
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The hunter becoming the hunted…exactly. 😉
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Love how you combined the two prompts – nicely done. And that is one scary scenario!
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I don’t know that I’ll do that again! Two prompt words and a prompt genre was a bit too much of a challenge (and I love challenges). 😉 Thank you!
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I wonder how Caleb feels about seeing his dad get eaten by a man-eating mermaid? Oh man! 🙂 Nice one, Sarah. ❤
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Well, he may not have to see that as I think he’s going to get eaten first. Um…not that that’s much better, I suppose. 😀 Thanks, Rachael.
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LOL I totally read that backwards. Swoops. Still, the idea of getting dragged to the bottom of the sea by a hungry mermaid with razor-sharp teeth…yeah, not my idea of a cup of tea. You are so good at packing a LOT of story in to a few words.
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Thanks. 🙂 This one was tough but fun to challenge myself.
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Oh, Sarah. I would not want to be someone else’s comfort food! Very well done.
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I wouldn’t want to be someone else’s food, period. 😉 Thanks, Norah.
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Agreed!
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