Tina’s legs, splattered with droplets of mud, stuck out from under her dress. A white, frilly thing her aunt insisted she wear today.
“What are you doing? Get off the ground!” Her aunt put her lips close to the girl’s ear, “People are staring!” She hissed.
“White is for weddings,” Tina traced patterns in the brown puddle by her hip. She swirled her finger in circles then squinted. “White is for clouds,” she pointed at the puddle. “Look. They bring rainbows to the mucky mud.”
“Get. Up.”
Tina wiped mud on her dress. “White is not for funerals, Auntie.”
Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch
February 9, 2017 prompt: Rainbows in puddles – In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a rainbow in a puddle. Create action or character reflection.
Nice! This one left me thinking – that’s good!
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That *is* good…I like that. 🙂
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I like the clever simplicity. 😊
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Thanks, Simon. 🙂
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😊
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How do you pack such a hammer punch into a few small paragraphs? So well done, Sarah! #mast ❤
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I shall henceforth be known as: “Sarah of the Few Words”. Or something.
Not sure. I don’t excel at lengthy pieces? I do enjoy writing these short ones, though. Thanks, my friend. #mast ❤
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You are welcome, Sarah of the Few Words. ❤
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The secret to your punch? Give you a rainbow! 😀 Oh, you just made it muddier. But, wow, that’s sharp writing and what a scene. Great juxtaposition of characters, too.
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Ugh, I know. I’m awful. I keep going to the Dark Side. Rainbows be damned!
Thank you. 🙂
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You’ve convinced me rainbows are damned! But it can’t darken your writing ability!
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Thanks. 😊
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Nicely done!
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Thank you! 🙂
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Nice one, Sarah, although, did you know in India white is the colour for funerals?
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Ooh! I didn’t. But I believe (don’t quote me on this) that in China, white is the color for funerals, too. Clothing and funeral cloth and even the money envelopes. Again, I *think*. Not positive.
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You did it again. I definitely wasn’t thinking funerals – more putting little girls in “pretty” clothes that are unsuitable for play. Good on her for finding a way, not so much to cause her aunt displeasure but, to express her opinion, which is just as, if not more so, valid as her aunt’s. Not her Mum’s funeral I hope.
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I did. I did do it again. I’m sorry. I just can’t help it. The Dark Side is pulling me…
Yes, exactly. She was not trying to cause a fight with her aunt but expressing her own displeasure (or upset) about the situation. (Um…sure. It’s not her mum’s funeral. Eek. Sorry, again. It can be anyone, really. Let’s say it’s a neighbor.)
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You did do it – again. You’d think I’d suspect it by now. But you are the expert at the surprise plummet into darkness! Never change. I love it! 🙂
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Thank you. ❤
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