Sweet Tea & Symphonies


The year before her father died, he pulled her aside, and asked her to listen to the crickets. Summer’s song, he had called them. Beautiful.

They sipped sweet tea to a chorus of insects.

He asked her to close her eyes and hear with her heart.

At the time, she didn’t know what he meant.

Now she sat, listening to a sound that might have been a symphony but had become the pull of a bow across the string of an old out-of-tune violin. To her, the crickets were a creaking porch swing empty of a father and daughter.



Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch

August 6, 2016 prompt: Sound In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that includes the sense of sound. It can be an onomatopoeia, a swearing session* with sound alike substitutes, lyrical prose or a description of a sound. 

* As tempted as I was to write a swearing session, I went with what was outside my window the evening I wrote this. Which was not a swearing session. Unless… Actually, I don’t speak cricket.

Sarah Brentyn Reef 99 Words - sig


22 thoughts on “Sweet Tea & Symphonies

  1. Pingback: Sound Check « Carrot Ranch Communications

  2. The emotion you have captured in this piece is very real and tangible. That summer chorus. Just thinking of it conjures up the warmth of summer and the crickets – here I’d say cicadas. They are the sound of our summer. That creaking empty porch swing is very haunting. Sometimes we just don’t know what we’ve got til it’s gone. Your final sentence is beautiful in the way it sums up the father-daughter relationship. Well done. Another well-written evocative piece.

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Once again, you amaze me, Sarah! I love how your stories cut so deep to real, human feeling, each time with a totally different story and never with over-sentimentality. I don’t know how you do it! But I always enjoy reading them!

    Liked by 1 person

Talk to the Shark

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.