I just did something unforgivable.
Shakespeare says, “What’s done cannot be undone.”
I know the pain of this truth.
I have felt the words “blind rage”. I don’t remember all of what I did in my fury.
No one talks about the confusion that follows, when you’re in a heap on the floor wondering what happened. Or the regret that scoops you out like a cantaloupe.
I am hollow.
How fortunate I am that regret has a serrated spoon. As an empty husk, there’s a chance I can live.
With the fragmented memories of this thing that I did.
Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch
March 9, 2016 prompt: Monster – In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a monster
Wow. I mean Fucking wow! That is an amazing snapshot. Full of emotion that can absolutely be felt.
Great work, Sarah. #mast ❤
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Thanks, my friend! ❤️ I have so many ‘monster’ stories I could write but loved this idea. Glad you could feel this one. #mast ❤️
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Definitely! Brava!!!
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This is amazing, almost like an older sister looking back at what she did to her younger sister… So raw and emotive… #justsaying
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Thanks. ❤️ (And you just couldn’t resist, could you? I’ll get to her. Promise.)
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Wow! “regret that scoops you out like a cantaloupe. I am hollow.” That is a powerful image, Sarah. It punches me in the gut and I share your hollowness. What a wonderful analogy. I can identify those feelings along with the wish/fear that you are so hollow you will implode. But oh, I love the life-raft you send, the “serrated spoon”. It’s a good feeling when the wound heals and the hollowness disappears. Almost. But never in entirety. What a great response to Charli’s prompt.
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Hey! My comment disappeared. Must have been all these monsters. 😄 They ate it. Anyway, thank you for your kind words, as always. 💖
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Monsters, monsters, everywhere!
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Ouch … flashin title
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Thanks!
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Awesome! This story is so full of emotion with a side of cutting details and imagery. You bulls-eyed this one. 🙂
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Bulls-eyed? Nice!
These are words I like to hear: emotion, details, imagery… Thank you kindly. ❤️
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This piece is really breathtaking. You are great at putting in similes and adding powerful words to give the best impact on the reader.
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Thanks!
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I’m going to add mine to the responses: Wow! First, I think that’s one of the most meaningful quotes back to the Bard I’ve seen used. This line: “Or the regret that scoops you out like a cantaloupe.” Followed by the three-word summary — great pacing. So many brilliant things come together here. Wow. And the story, the breakdown of emotional rage and shown from the inside out. Can I give you a third Wow? Okay, I will!
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Oh, I love that quote. (It’s also a fav of my little one.) A triple ‘wow’. 💖 Thanks, lovely lady! High praise. I’m glad you liked it. Much appreciated.
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