One of Those Days

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After getting a flat tire, breaking the heel off my shoe, and cracking the screen on my phone, the heater went. I called the repairman and made it to the post office just after they closed. That’s when I noticed I dropped my ATM envelope full of cash.

We spotted it at the same time, the man and I.

I, in new shoes, he, in tattered socks, dashed toward the envelope. He picked it up, looked around, and asked, “Did anyone drop their money?”

He stood.

I waited.

He walked.

It was the first time I’d smiled all day.

 

 

Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch

October 14, 2015 prompt: Serendipity — In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that reveals or explores a moment of serendipity. How did it come about? What did it lead to? You can express a character’s view of the moment or on serendipity in general. Use the element of surprise or show how it is unexpected or accidentally good.

 

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30 thoughts on “One of Those Days”

    • Aww. Thanks, Charli. ❤ Perspective is awesome. This is one of those prompts that, right when I saw it, I knew exactly what I wanted to do and it took very little editing for word count. I loved twisting the serendipity. Yes…a blessing for both of them.

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      • Yeah. Maybe it is better to get it over in one day and have a nicer – year!
        My year of falling down was 2012. I fell four times. The first was the worst. I fell down the stairs and knocked myself out briefly. Fortunately there was no serious damage. I fell three times after that, none of which was serious, just annoying and embarrassing. I have not fallen since. I’m glad I got it all over then!
        And yes. I do know what a loving, kind, compassionate and caring person you are. That’s one of the things I like about you! 🙂

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  10. Great flash Sarah. You managed to get so much into it. You placed me in her disastrous day and yet compared to the man’s life these were just hiccoughs. What I really liked about the way you dealt with this was that you didn’t make us pity the man, but rather you gave us someone to respect and admire as in spite of being down on his luck he first checked whether anyone had lost the money. I loved both your characters here and the moment of the smile.

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    • Thank you so much, Irene. ❤ I'm glad you loved the characters. (I did, too.) I messed around with the word count so I could make sure the man asked about the money and waited a bit. I wanted to add a little more there about him checking but…99 words.

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