“Just do it,” Anna shoved him toward the door. “He’s alone—no witnesses.”
“I don’t know…”
“I’ll be right behind you.”
He placed his palm on the door, took a breath, and pushed. The room was filled with people seated around a dining table. They fell silent and stared. One man in a charcoal grey suit stood up. “Who the hell are you?”
“I’m,” he spotted Anna in the hall, having a giggle fit. “I’m the man who is in love with the devious, scheming…amazing woman you call ‘daughter’. I would be honored to call her ‘wife’. Sir.”
Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch
September 23 Prompt: Declaration – In 99 words (no more, no less) declare an intention in a story. Is it one person, a character speaking up or speaking out? Is it a group or a nation? Create a tension before or after the declaration. It can be private or public, big or small. Does it have power to those who state it or hear? What does it change?
Well, I guess he’s learning quickly what he’s in for with her. Great take on the prompt. I half expected dead people. I’m not sure why.
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Hmm… I’m not sure why, either. 😉
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Weaker sex? Pa! This feels very familiar….
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Oh, no. Seriously? That’s awesome!
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Wow! What a way to introduce himself to his prospective father-in-law.? Would like to know what happened next?
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Right? 😉 Well, I only get 99 words for this challenge but I think it’s safe to say they will not have a boring life together.
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Loved it. Have you written any books?
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Aw, thanks. So, just to be clear, when you say ‘written any books’ do you mean “written” or “published”? Because not so much on the “published” piece. Also, I’m wondering why you ask. (This is where you can tell me I’m such a good writer that you just assumed…) 😉
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You’re such a good writer i assumed hahaha. I was wondering if you had any work on Amazon.
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Ah, see, that’s all I needed. 😉
I don’t. But since I’m a writer-type person, I know people who know people, you know? And they have books on Amazon.
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Yes I’ve done the Amazon thing too. I love it!
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Good thing he likes her devious sense of humor! Great build up of tension, but it’s clear that no matter how nervous or how many witnesses, he’s ready for it. Did you say this was creepy? Tense, not creepy. Funny, too!
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Okay. You got me. I did say ‘creepy’. It was a set-up to lure you to the Reef. (See what I did there? I’m so clever I can’t even stand myself. Really. I can’t.) Yes, he does love her sense of humor. Pfft! Who wouldn’t? 😉 Thanks, friend.
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Haha, that was great! Well done!!
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Thanks! 😀
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Well done. I also had death in mind. Had them down as a murdering duo. Had a good laugh at how wrong I was. Great flash. Great declaration.
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Glad I’m not the only one.
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I am so glad you had a laugh at the end there. That’s what I planned. 😉 Schemed, rather. Thanks.
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I didn’t have you pegged as a schemer
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Only in fiction.
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Humor. Always a good way to get into a new family 🙂
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Ha! 😀 Yes. That would do it. Depending on the family…
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I got proposed to on a Friday the 13th.
Best day of luck ever! 😉
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Love it!
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Thanks, Lisa! Good to see you. ❤
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Hahaha! Love it. His description of her is perfect – but he loves her anyway! He was a brave man to make his declaration in that way.
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Brave? Yes. In love? Definitely. I rather like his description, too. In fact, I really like that girl.
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Fun-loving and endearing with a good sense of humour – my sort of girl too!
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The opening sounded so ominous, I had no idea what I’d be in for. Great declaration.
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Hee… Thanks, Kate. 😈 That makes my day.
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