“I hate these,” she fingered the rough cotton of her hospital gown.
Her husband looked at the ceiling, a loud sigh escaping his lips.
“I’m the one getting stuck with needles. What’s your problem?”
“Just…”
“Whatever. Always bitching. Oh, sorry. You’re a guy. I must be the bitch. So you’re, what, a passive-aggressive asshole?”
The door opened. “So,” the doctor began as a larger unfamiliar man followed him into the room.
Her husband jumped up. “Is she…?”
“Of course I am,” she spat. “The nausea, fatigue, vomiting. How far along doc? And who’s this lughead?”
“This is officer Norwood.”
March 18 Prompt: Symptoms (Write a story to reveal a characters symptoms)
Flash Fiction Challenge over at Carrot Ranch
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Not everyone is on the same page with the symptoms in this story! You definitely portray a couple on edge yet there are so many tantalizing possibilities… Lughead! Great way to acknowledge the detective! This story could be a prompt for “what happens next…” 🙂
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😀 This is definitely a “what happens next” story. I typed it out on my phone then realized, when I got it into Word, that it was waaay too long. Had to cut it almost in half. And here we are left with a will-anyone-get-what’s-going-on-now? flash. Let’s see…
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I love the tension between the couple – not sure yet who the lughead is, was expecting it to be the father, but a detective? More next week presumably!
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Ooh… I’ve never done a continuation on Carrot Ranch. I was going to work on this one or just bring back some of what I cut out for the 99 words but maybe I’ll try to work it into next week’s prompt. That will be a challenge. Thanks!
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Well done. I am also at the “what’s next?” thinking. So many options?
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Thanks! I think I know where this story is going…I just can’t get it into the prompt this week.
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